Rich countries often give money to poor countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aids. Agree or disagree?

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In recent times, the availability of financial assistance from developed

countries

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to developing

countries

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has aroused great attention. Some people believe

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poor nations should be given other types of support

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of only financial aid. I partially agree with

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statement. Admittedly, offering financial support does boast many benefits.

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of all, it alleviates emergent problems from poverty-stricken

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such

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as hunger, disease, or even survival.

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, having money allows poor citizens to create more opportunities to build their homes.

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, they can allocate their finance to build basic infrastructures, including roads, hospitals, and schools. These constructions contribute to job opportunities,

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and economic

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development, allowing their citizen to escape poverty.

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, providing merely financial aid is not enough to help poor

countries

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solve poverty entirely, because skillful experts are not available in these regions.

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, some types of assistance like skill

experts export

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expert exports

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should be given by wealthy nations.

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, some technological experts should be transported to poverty-stricken

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to provide guidance and knowledge to help the local workers construct their

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, which is beneficial to their city construction in the long run. What`s more, long-term cooperation in various

area

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such

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as education, medicine and sport, with poor

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mutual

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but

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help

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stimulate their long-term economic development. In conclusion,

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providing financial aid from wealthy

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is crucial for poor nations, offering other means of help like talent export or

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communication from rich

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important to help solve poverty entirely.

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Expand on specific examples, especially regarding successful instances where non-financial aid has helped developing countries.

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Consider addressing potential counterarguments to strengthen the essay's position.

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Provide more transitions between sentences and paragraphs to improve flow and make the essay easier to follow.

strength

The essay effectively presents a balanced view, acknowledging the benefits of financial aid while proposing alternative forms of assistance.

strength

You have a clear introduction and a strong conclusion that effectively summarize and wrap up the argument.

strength

The points are logically organized, with each paragraph handling a specific aspect of the argument.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

252 words

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Your opinion

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