Rich countries often give money to poor countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aids. Agree or disagree?
In recent times, the availability of financial assistance from developed
countries
to developing Use synonyms
countries
has aroused great attention. Some people believe Use synonyms
the
poor nations should be given other types of support Correct your spelling
that
instead
of only financial aid. I partially agree with Linking Words
this
statement.
Admittedly, offering financial support does boast many benefits. Linking Words
Frist
of all, it alleviates emergent problems from poverty-stricken Correct your spelling
First
countries
, Use synonyms
such
as hunger, disease, or even survival. Linking Words
In addition
, having money allows poor citizens to create more opportunities to build their homes. Linking Words
For example
, they can allocate their finance to build basic infrastructures, including roads, hospitals, and schools. These constructions contribute to job opportunities, Linking Words
economic
development, allowing their citizen to escape poverty.
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and economic
However
, providing merely financial aid is not enough to help poor Linking Words
countries
solve poverty entirely, because skillful experts are not available in these regions. Use synonyms
Therefore
, some types of assistance like skill Linking Words
experts export
should be given by wealthy nations. Fix the agreement mistake
expert exports
For example
, some technological experts should be transported to poverty-stricken Linking Words
area
to provide guidance and knowledge to help the local workers construct their Fix the agreement mistake
areas
countries
, which is beneficial to their city construction in the long run. What`s more, long-term cooperation in various Use synonyms
area
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areas
such
as education, medicine and sport, with poor Linking Words
countries
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not only Unnecessary verb
apply
promote
mutual Correct subject-verb agreement
promotes
relationship
but Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
also
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help
stimulate their long-term economic development.
In conclusion, Correct subject-verb agreement
helps
while
providing financial aid from wealthy Linking Words
countries
is crucial for poor nations, offering other means of help like talent export or Use synonyms
long-run
communication from rich Correct word choice
long-term
countries
is Use synonyms
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important to help solve poverty entirely.Linking Words
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suggestion
Expand on specific examples, especially regarding successful instances where non-financial aid has helped developing countries.
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Consider addressing potential counterarguments to strengthen the essay's position.
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Provide more transitions between sentences and paragraphs to improve flow and make the essay easier to follow.
strength
The essay effectively presents a balanced view, acknowledging the benefits of financial aid while proposing alternative forms of assistance.
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