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The chart bellow gives information about the level of education of Bulgarian people who wanted to go and live in another country in 2002, 2006 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart bellow gives information about the level of education of Bulgarian people who wanted to go and live in another country in 2002, 2006 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart above illustrates information in the
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year
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years
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 2002, 2006 and 2008 about the
education
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 level of those in Bulgaria who were planning to go and live in another country.
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, Bulgarians who
most
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were most
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 likely to go and live abroad were those with secondary
education
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. On the other side, the least goes to Bulgarians with a higher
education
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, with the exception of the
year
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 2006. In the
year
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 2002, around 65 per
cent
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 of secondary educated Bulgarians wanted to live abroad. The lesser amount
go
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 to those with a primary and lower
education
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 at 18 per
cent
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. The lowest
were
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 held by higher
education
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 at 17 per
cent
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.
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, in the
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 2006, it was increased to 20 per
cent
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. Making it second in place. The number of primary and lower
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 has
also
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 undergone a small
grow
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 to 19 per
cent
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. Exceptionally,
percentage
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the percentage
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 of secondary
education
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 has decreased
into
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 61 per
cent
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.
On the other hand
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, in the
year
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 2008, the highest percentage was held by secondary
education
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 at 59 per
cent
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.
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, it was followed by primary and lower
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 at 32 per
cent
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Finally
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, the lowest percentage of all goes to higher
education
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 at 9 per
cent
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year, education, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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