the graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centers in Melbourne,Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparision where relevant.

the graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centers in Melbourne,Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparision where relevant.
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The line graph shows data about the number of people
how
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who
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took part in various activities at one particular social centre in
Melborne
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Melbourne
, Australia in
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a 20_year
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20_year
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20-year
period between 2000 and 2020.
Overall
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, what can be seen is that
film
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the film
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club was by far the busiest
erea
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area
. And table tennis was the second
papular
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popular
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in the
last
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year. As for the film club, it started with almost 65% in 2000, did not change during
this
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20-year period
mantioned
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mentioned
and ended at the same point, in 2020. Samely, Regarding
the
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apply
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Martial arts, there was a slight fluctuation
around
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of around
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35%, between 2000 and 2020. If we look at the details for the Amateur dramatics, between 2000 and 2005, it remained steady at around 26%. At
this
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point, it began to fall steeply each year
untill
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until
it finished at just under 10%, in the
last
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year.
By contrast
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, the figures for the Musical performances witnessed a gradual increase after the first 5-year period. After
which
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this
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, it reached almost 20% of the attendees. Looking at the Table tennis figures, it was approximately 18%, it did not show a significant change until 2010.
Next,
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there was a sharp growth in the number of people
how
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who
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participated there, in the following
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last
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apply
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decade, rocketing to over
the
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apply
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half of them.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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