You are concerned about a playground in your local college. Write a letter to the college principal. In your letter: - express your concern on things in the playground that are not safe; - explain why it is important to fix them; - suggest any improvements that make playground safe for everyone.

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Dear Mr. Philip, I am writing

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about

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a concerning matter regarding our college

playgrond

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playground

safety

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for pupils during playtime. There are lots of

concrte

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concrete

pillars around the

play ground

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playground

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which

seldom

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used for making

pandels

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panels

for

offical programms

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official programs

. They are

beuing

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being

put without any

safety

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guards and sometimes are unavoidable

while

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ensuring a large

outfiled

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outfit

for playing. These unwanted pillars are

urgnet

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urgent

to be

removeb

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removed

from there. They are very strong and have very rough and sharp surfaces which hurt pupils

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they

are indulge

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in playing or

exercise

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exercising

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This

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might cause severe injury to them.

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these might cause

invalaube

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invaluable

cost

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costs

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to pupils

as well as

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guardians.

Such

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incindents

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incidents

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effect

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affect

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our

college

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reputation

also

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. I am

hopefull

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hopeful

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that, it will be very effective if either the pillars are removed from places. I think

threr

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there

are no other alternatives as they are

saldom

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seldom

used.

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for

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incresing

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increasing

safety

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in the fields, necessary

safety

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gurds

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guards

and

safety

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sighns

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signs

might be set. That will aware people

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moving around and playing in the field. I request your early steps

regardig

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regarding

the matter. Your

Sincerly

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Sincerely

John

shafaeat.shoaibWed Jan 15 2025

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Coherence & Cohesion

Consider restructuring certain sentences to enhance clarity and flow.

Task Achievement

Use a formal tone consistently throughout the letter for a complete task fulfillment.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter begins and ends with appropriate greetings and closings.

Task Achievement

You address all the points mentioned in the task which shows a clear understanding of the question.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

184 words

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The Closing

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