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The charts below shows housework in country in periof from 1920 and 2019

The charts below shows housework in country in periof from 1920 and 2019
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The plots
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 the difference
of
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 ownership of electronic devices and spent value of time for housework in homes of one nation in
period
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the period
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 from 1920 to 2019.
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, all three appliances dramatically increased in
this
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 timetable,
also
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 refrigerator and vacuum cleaner are stopped in their highest point.
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, between
20th
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 and 21st centuries hours per week for domestic tasks have fallen constantly. The washing machine rose from 40% to nearly third quarter in the term from 1920 to 1960. After that in
next
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 20 years dropped by almost 10%.
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,
since
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 1980 to 2019
face
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 a
rising
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 and demonstrated
gradual
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 climb to more than 70%.
Other refrigerator
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 eventually went up from almost 0 to 90 % in only 40 years,
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 vacuum
cleaner
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 doubled
its
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 result to 90%.
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, both two cleaning devices go up to 100% until 2000
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 and keep their outcome persistent. Home duties started from 50 hours per week and declined
regulary
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regularly
 in
four decade
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 duration to one-fifth. In
timeframe
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the timeframe
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 from 1960 to 2000
years
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 it displays
little
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 result
of
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falling by almost 5%, whilst in the next 20
year
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years
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 it presented
consisted
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 data.
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, cleaning tasks hit a low of
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all
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conclusion in
stage
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 of over one-tenth.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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