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You are living in a University Residence, and you have a problem with the high levels of noise from a new campus restaurant which is open late at night. Write a letter to the Governor of the University. In your letter, Complain about the situation Say why this is a problem And Propose ways reduce the noise.

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Dear Mr. Smith, I am writing regarding the amount of noise coming from the new canteen which has just opened near the University residence.
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 I am happy that we have that facility, the restaurant remains open up to midnight each night, and
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 there is considerable talking, shouting and the sounds of
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 continuing until about 12:30 each night.
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 causes
me
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my neighbors in the residence a serious problem
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 because at that time we are either trying to sleep
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 or in some cases trying to study in our bedrooms. In both cases noise and commotion
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 us, making us tired in the mornings or affecting the progress of our studies. I am sure you will appreciate that
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 is a very worrying situation for us all. I would like to suggest that the campus authorities restrict the canteen’s opening to 11pm at the latest on the weekdays, leaving it at
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midnight during the weekend. I propose that we would
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 put up some sights reminding users to be considered and keep their noise to an absolute minimum. These are simple steps which would make us all very grateful indeed. Thank
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 your attention to
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 important matter. Kind Regards
Clauda
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Claudia
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language
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task achievement
Include more specific examples of how noise affects daily activities.
writing tone
Clear and polite tone maintained throughout the letter.
logical structure
Logical flow of ideas from the problem to suggestive measures.
single idea per paragraph
Effective use of paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the problem.
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