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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.
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, the
nickel
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price
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 changes show a downward trend throughout the
year
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. Meanwhile, the
price
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 of copper fluctuated during
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 time. When compared to the percentage variations in
price
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 months a significant change in zinc was shown in the month of February.During the mid-
year
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year
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 from July to September all three metals had fixed prices.Yet copper had the highest demand compared to the other two.There is a significant rise in the
price
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 of all three metals
at the end
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 of the
year
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, especially as
nickel
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price
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 has increased
in
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 2% compared to the previous month. It is important to note that these metals are in high requirement at the beginning of the
year
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 as
nickel
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 has shown its highest change in
price
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 in January at 6%,and the
price
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 decreases in the next few months.Compared to the other two
Nickel
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 had the highest demand in January and zinc had the least claim, yet the highest interest in December.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nickel, price, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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