Influence of human beings on the world's ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of biodiversity. What are the causes of loss of biodiversity? What solutions can you suggest?
The extinction of wild species has been a critical issue in recent years. Many of them are
at
the verge of destruction. Human activities can cause Change preposition
on
this
problem, Linking Words
for instance
, damaging their habitats, Linking Words
contributing
to the imbalance in the Correct word choice
and contributing
eco-system
. Fortunately, there are various measures to overcome these issues.
There are many Correct your spelling
ecosystem
problem
that Change to a plural noun
problems
are
contributing Change the verb form
is
the
disruption Change preposition
to the
to
the ecosystem, Change preposition
of
first
being Correct article usage
the first
deforestration
, in order to expand cities and infrastructure, Correct your spelling
deforestation
Correct article usage
the goverment
goverment
has to cut down Correct your spelling
government
trees
, and clear the area for new construction Use synonyms
to begin
, in doing so they Linking Words
also
remove homes of many animals forcing them to migrate to other places. Linking Words
For
Linking Words
example
the kingfisher bird is a dangered species now because Add a comma
example,
city
of Add an article
the city
kitchener
cut down all the Change the capitalization
Kitchener
trees
in Use synonyms
Correct article usage
the waterloo
waterloo
area for the new municipal office forcing the birds out of that region. Another issue is Capitalize word
Waterloo
uncontolled
hunting, many of the hunters, hunt animals Correct your spelling
uncontrolled
controlled
such
as deer, moose and crocodiles in order to use their skin to make luxury products, that they can sell and make profits, Linking Words
this
phenomenon is expanding the gap in Linking Words
eco-system
as they do not care about natural Correct article usage
the eco-system
eco system
cycle.
Fortunately, is not too late to recover, the authorities should implement some strict Correct your spelling
ecosystem
guideline
in order to avoid Fix the agreement mistake
guidelines
this
tough situation, Linking Words
for instance
, if we remove one tree for the means of expanding infrastructure, Linking Words
then
two Linking Words
trees
should be planted someplace else, Use synonyms
this
will make sure that more plants are being planted than being removed, Linking Words
furthermore
, forest department should monitor and control the hunting allowed in their area as to not put any species under danger.
in conclusion, though humans did Linking Words
damaged
the eco-system by carelessly Change the verb form
damage
carring
out hunting and deforestation, Correct your spelling
carrying
i
Change the capitalization
I
belive
the Correct your spelling
believe
measure
that are put in motion Fix the agreement mistake
measures
such
as planting more Linking Words
trees
and following strict guidelines about hunting, we can manage not to put any Use synonyms
speices
under Correct your spelling
species
the
threat of mass extinction.Correct article usage
apply
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grammar
Improve grammatical accuracy, particularly in sentence structures and subject-verb agreement.
writing mechanics
Ensure consistency in capitalizing proper nouns and the beginning of sentences.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to strengthen your arguments and support your main points.
coherence and cohesion
Work on logical sequencing of ideas and paragraphs to improve the overall flow.
organization
The essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion.
task achievement
You have identified key causes of biodiversity loss and proposed solutions effectively.
task achievement
The examples, though needing more specificity, relate well to the topics discussed.
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