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The line graph shows visits to and from the Uk from 1979 to 1999, and the bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph shows visits to and from the Uk from 1979 to 1999, and the bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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the line chart gives information about visits to and from the
UK
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 in the 80s to 90s and the bar chart provides data on the most popular countries visited by the British in 1999.
overall
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, visits abroad by
UK
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 citizens and visits to England by overseas residents increased in
years
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the years
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.
While
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,
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 the bar chart for the most popular countries visited by the British saw the popularity of France. The number of
UK
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 residents visiting foreign always increased from about 13 to 52 million people from 1979 to 1999.
Then
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, the number of overseas residents who travel to England continued to grow in 20 years from nearly 10 to 28 million people In 1999, the most popular location visited by
UK
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 citizens was France. It took the lead in rank and
had
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apply
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occupied about 11,7 million British
travel
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travellers
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.Spain has number 2 in rank and on par with France with
the
Correct article usage
a
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amount
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number
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 of people was have an advantage of approximately 9,6
millions
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million
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. USA, Greece and Turkey
also
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 had notable numbers 4,3,2 respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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