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the chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

the chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart illustrates six consumer goods,
such
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 as personal stereos, tennis, racquets, perfumes, CDs, toys and photographic film. These possessions are used in Germany, France, Italy and
Britain
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.
Overall
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, people from
Britain
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 buy the presented goods more often than people from other countries. In most categories, German residents buy fewer
products
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 from the presented categories.
However
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, France and Italy, unlike the other two countries, spend approximately the same amount of money on
products
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.
Firstly
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, there is a wide range of consumer preferences. Toys and personal stereos are among the most popular
products
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 bought in
Britain
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. Germans,
on the other hand
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, are less interested in these
products
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 and spend significantly less on toys and stereos. German consumers buy perfumes less frequently than those in the United Kingdom. Spending trends for these
products
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 are similar in France and Italy, suggesting that the two nations have a little bit similar tastes.
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, there is a noticeable difference between necessities and less common items in each nation.
Britain
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 has the highest spend on all
products
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.
Also
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, the country with the lowest expenses is Germany.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words britain, products with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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