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The given bar charts illustrate the amount of money in million euros which MG Entertainment profited from divergent categories in three European nations in 1997 and 2007.

The given bar charts illustrate the amount of money in million euros which MG Entertainment profited from divergent categories in three European nations in 1997 and 2007.
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The bar chart above illustrates four different European countries in which MG Entertainment gained money in the year 1997, distinguished by its various categories.
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, Britain is the most profitable country for MG Entertainment in all its sectors, with the exception of the tennis racquet sales, which holds the same number as Italy.
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, Germany is the least country for
this
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 entertainment company to raise profits from. To start with, the highest amount of money is collected through photographic films in Britain at 170
million
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. The same goes for the rest categories, in which Britain remains the most profitable country.
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, the second place is held by the Frenchs, at 165
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 for photographic film, 158
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euros
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 for CDs, and 158
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 for Toys.
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, the sales of perfumes, tennis racquets, and personal stereos are weak. In spite of that, Germany has the lowest numbers in most categories. The trend for Italy shows constant fluctuation. The highest sales is achieved through toys at 157
million
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. Making it the same number as France. But Italy mostly beat France through perfumes, tennis racquets, and personal stereos profits.

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