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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.Summarize the formation byselectingand reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.Summarize the formation byselectingand reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph above illustrates the UK's levels of
production
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in
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of
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 main fuels in the years 1980 to 2000.
Overall
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, the graph shows that the highest
production
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 went to petroleum.
Whereas
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, the making of coal started in
the
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second place, which
then
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has
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was
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 replaced by natural gas in the year 1992. To start with, the graph implies that the manufacturing of petroleum started at 90 in 1981.
Then
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, it has undergone rapid growth to 140 in 1984. The trend
continues
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continued
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 to show constant fluctuation, until
in
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apply
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1999,
which
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when
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 it
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then has
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reached its peak at 150.
On the other hand
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,
productions
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production
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 for coal started at 80 in 1981, but continued to decline throughout the years. The lowest number for
coals
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coal
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production
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 was 28 in 1984.
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 for natural gas, its
production
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 levels
was began
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began
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 with its lowest number at 38 in 1981.
However
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, the trend shows
continous
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continuous
 growth over the years. In 1996, the number reached 80, and
then
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maintained
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continued
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 to increase to 100 in the year 2000.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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