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Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

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The line graph compares the monthly percentage changes in the prices of
copper
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,
nickel
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, and
zinc
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 throughout 2014.
Overall
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,
zinc
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 exhibited a steady upward trend over the
year
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,
whereas
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copper
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 and
nickel
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 experienced fluctuations and an
overall
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 decline, albeit at varying rates.
Nickel
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 began the
year
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 with the sharpest increase, rising by 6% in January.
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,
this
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 was followed by a steep decline, reaching a low of around 1% in March.
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nickel
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 rebounded slightly to about 1% by May, it plummeted to -3% in June, marking the most significant drop among the three metals. From July to September, the price remained stable at -1%, before recovering to positive territory in November and ending the
year
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 at 1%.
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,
zinc
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 demonstrated a relatively steady performance. Starting at 0% in January, it climbed gradually to 2% in February, though its growth stagnated between March and June, eventually dipping to -1%. After maintaining a flat trajectory until October,
zinc
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 prices surged to 3% in November before settling at 2% in December, making it the only metal to end the
year
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 with a positive trend.
Copper
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 showed a more gradual but consistent decline in the first half of the
year
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, falling from 2% in January to around -0.5% in June. From July onwards, the price of
copper
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 gradually improved, reaching 1% in September and remaining stable at
this
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 level until the
year
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’s end.

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Make the introduction more engaging by including a statement about the importance of these metals.
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Ensure to mention all significant trends and details for complete coverage.
coherence cohesion
As you have maintained a logical flow, use linking words to enhance the clarity between sections, such as "similarly" or "in contrast."
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You have described the main trends and compared them accurately over time.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a logical progression and smooth flow of ideas.
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You provided specific examples with detailed descriptions for each metal, which demonstrates good analytical skills.

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