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The maps below illustrate how Frenton changed from 1990 to 2012

The maps below illustrate how Frenton changed from 1990 to 2012
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The 2 maps illustrate
development
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the development
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 of Frenton for
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last
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the last
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 22 years. There have been several changes as the relocation of playing fields and
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park
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a park
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 with
cafe
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a cafe
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, hospital expansion, construction of flats, emergence of
hotel
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the hotel
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, golf course, restaurants, technopark, cinema and supermarket. In 1990, to the north of the Frenton were playing fields with trees,
school
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a school
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,
hospital
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a hospital
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,
bank
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a bank
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 and
library
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a library
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. On the other side of the road were located
cafe
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cafes
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 and
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park
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parks
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,
theatre
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theatres
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, shops and houses. Turning to the
present day
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 map, it can be seen that
bank
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banks
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 have become
restaurant
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restaurants
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 and playing fields with trees being replaced by blocks of flats. The hospital was extended in size. The school and library
remains
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. Trees
all
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 gone to make
a
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apply
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way for
techno
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the techno
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park
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. Flats were built on the east side of the High Street. The cafe and
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park
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 been converted into a hotel and golf course. Theatre and shops have all gone and were replaced by
cinema
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cinemas
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 and
supermarket
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supermarkets
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.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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