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The bar chart below shows the number of houses built per year in two cities, Derby and Nottingham, Between 2000 and 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The bar chart below shows the number of houses built per year in two cities, Derby and Nottingham, Between 2000 and 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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 bar chart compares the construction of new
houses
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 in two cities -
Derby
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 and
Nottingham
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, from 2000 to 2009. Generally speaking, the number of new
homes
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 in these two cities increased steadily through the years and inhabitants of
Derby
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 up building more abodes in the final
year
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 despite a considerable gap in the previous
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. As the data suggest, around 95 residences were built in these two cities in 2000 and 50 of them were established in
Nottingham
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. In 2002, roughly 70
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houses
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 came into existence in
Derby
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 which was considerably higher than the development of new abodes in
Nottingham
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.
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 trend continued until 2005. Next
year
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, almost no new
houses
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 were built in
Nottingham
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 but
Derby
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 witnessed the creation of almost 110 new
homes
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. In 2007, a reverse case was obvious when around 190 brand new buildings were made in
Nottingham
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 compared to just over 100 in
Derby
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. Building new
homes
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 in 2008 showed another anomaly when an ignorable number of new
homes
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 were developed in
Nottingham
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 against nearly 280 brand new
houses
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 in
Derby
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. In the final
year
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, 250 new dwellings were added to
Nottingham
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 city
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 almost 350 were developed for
Derby
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 residents.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words houses, derby, nottingham, homes, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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