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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The
 line graph indicates the three types of areas(the coast, the mountains and the lakes) which showed
a
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the
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number
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 of overseas
visitors
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 between 1987 and 2007.
Overall
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,
visitors
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 to all three different areas started with similar indicators but, during 50 years it
seem
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 that visiting the cost was popular among others.
To begin
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with
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 at the start of
period
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the period
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, the coast was the most popular area with 40
thousand
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then
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 it fell dramatically to about 35
thousand
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.
Despite
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,
reduce
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apply
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the popularity of visiting the coast had remained the highest with
the
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a
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 pick of about 75
thousand
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 after all.
On the other hand
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,
overseas
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for overseas
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visitors
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 who travel the mountains and the lakes, their
number
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 was the same in 1992. But, the maximum
number
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 of mountain
visitors
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 was about 35
thousand
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.
Also
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, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 to the lakes peaked in 2002. During the next 5 years,
this
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 indicator decreased by approximately 25
thousand
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 and reached 50
thousand
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visitors
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at the end
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 of the period

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuations
  • steady growth
  • decline
  • popular destination
  • significant changes
  • peak
  • trough
  • speculate
  • geopolitical events
  • attractiveness
  • positive outlook
  • challenges
  • tourism industry
  • overseas visitors
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