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The line graph shows the changes in the population of some cities till date. Write a report and select the main features, making comparison where relevant.

The line graph shows the changes in the population of some cities till date. Write a report and select the main features, making comparison where relevant.
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The line graph depicts the population of some cities,
such
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 as Columbia and
Yamhill
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, in the state of Oregon by country over a 60-year period from 1940 to 2000.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that the total
of
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crowd in
Washington
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 remained the highest,
whereas
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 that of other cities experienced an upward trend throughout the given period. Starting in 1940, at 75
thousand
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 community, the statistic of those who lived in
Washington
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 was the highest, followed by
Yamhill
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 and Columbia at almost 30 and 28
thousand
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people
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, respectively. It is interesting to note that,
while
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 the figure of
people
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 in
Washington
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 surged significantly in 1970, that of other populations rose moderately.
For example
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,
Yamhill
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 grew mildly in number of
people
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 from 30 to 45 in 1970. From 1970 onwards, the number of citizens in
Washington
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 skyrocketed dramatically and peaked at 240
thousand
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people
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 in 2015. In the same way, both
of
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the number of
Yamhill
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 and Columbia increased drastically, reaching the highest point at 90 and 75
thousand
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people
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 in the same year.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words yamhill, washington, thousand, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Population
  • Trends
  • Urbanization
  • Growth
  • Decline
  • Comparison
  • Rapid increase
  • Plateau
  • Stabilization
  • Infrastructure
  • Economic factors
  • Migration patterns
  • Natural disasters
  • Saturation
  • Time frame
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