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The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The bar chart demonstrates the average real
estate
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price
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change
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 in the 2 periods, which are 1990 to 1995 and 1996 to 2002, in 5 different major cities in Europe, North America, and Asia.
Overall
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, in the first
period
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, 1990 to 1995, there were negative
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change
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changes
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 in real
estate
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price
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prices
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 in 3 cities, New York, Tokyo, and London.
While
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 the
change
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 in housing
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price
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prices
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 were positive in Madrid and Frankfurt. In
second
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period
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 of real
estate
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price
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prices
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, which
were
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was
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 from 1996 to 2002, there was only one city that still remained
having
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to have
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minus
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a minus
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change
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 in housing
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price
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prices
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, which was Tokyo.
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 other countries had positive
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change
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changes
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. In detail, From the first
period
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 to the second
period
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, the city that had the most
increased
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increase
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 in real
estate
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price
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prices
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 was London from
being
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apply
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in minus
percent
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per cent
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 rate to
positive
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the positive
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 rate at over
than
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apply
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10
percent
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per cent
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. Despite the
change
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 in home
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price
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prices
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 in Frankfurt remained positive, it was the only place
that
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the
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 house pricing rate decreased
comparing
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compared
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 to other cities.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words estate, price, change, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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