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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing house work in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing house work in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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line charts compare the percentage of electrical item usage and number of
housework
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 duration in every family from 1920 until 2019. It is shown that the percentage of electronic tools is developing year by year, but not as the same as the amount of time that
housework
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 is spent, which is levelled down in the
last
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 90 years period. Electronic
machines
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such
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 as
refrigators
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refrigerators

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and washing
machines
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 were commonly used in 1920
reached
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reaching

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 30 to 40
percent
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per cent

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.
On the other hand
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, nobody used vacuum cleaners in 1920, but the percentage of people
used
Correct pronoun usage
who used

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 these tools jumped by 50% in 1940. After 1940, these
machines
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 experienced great roses until 2019. Even though families who used
housework
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machines
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 were increasing until 2019, the number of households that doing
housework
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 decreased from 1920 until 2019. In 1920, families spent 50 hours per week doing these activities, but it levelled off to 10 hours per week in 2019.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words housework, machines with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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