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The given colour chart depicts essential changes in the town of Stromer between 1995 and the present time

The given colour chart depicts essential changes in the town of Stromer between 1995 and the present time
The map shows the development of the town of Stromer between 1995 and now.
Overall
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, it is crystal clear that there are a plethora of renovations which are done after years and many areas replaced by one another.
Firstly
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, in 1995 the centre of the town had
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a
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shop
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shops
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 and
house
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houses
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, which were situated next to
forest
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the forest
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 and
road
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a road
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,
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however
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however,
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 nowadays there are 3 shops and
school
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a school
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 between them.
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Furthermore
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Furthermore,
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 the new airport lies in the northeast,
also
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 two apartments and
forest
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a forest
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 are sited
left-hand
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on left-hand
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 side
to
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of
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 the airport. Mowing towards the rest of the information, in the past era, there was huge farmland,
however
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, today the farm size has decreased by three times. On the most
last
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 territory of farmland were erected three shops, four apartments and
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the house
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house
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houses
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also
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 were moved there.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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