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Some people believe that academic success depends on good teachers, while others argue that it depends on the attitude of the student. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Academic success is often attributed to the quality of teachers,
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 others emphasize the importance of a student’s attitude.
This
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 essay will discuss both views and arguments that a combination of both factors is essential to get a quality
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education. On the one hand, the role of educated teachers has a pivotal effect on
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’ success. Skilled educators are informed about all the effective teaching methods and renewed materials.
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, they know how to engage
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 studying so well.
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, a teacher who uses interactive teaching ways and real-world examples can make the driest subject even more attractive, thereby getting the attention of
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 and improving their success on the grades. With
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 are more likely to push themselves into academic life since their teachers give them incentives and motivate them. On the
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 hand,
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’ approach to studying is equally significant on the improvement of the academic results. No matter how exceptional a teacher is, the lack of a student’s curiosity, motivation, and determination, the results will be almost minimal.
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, a student who actively talks with his teacher, reads extra materials, asks questions, behaves proactively during classes, is closer
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 goals and boosting his knowledge more than others. In conclusion, in my opinion, since it is interdependent and there might
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’ motivations have undeniably importance on the academic journey. These factors should be balanced in order to get a quality education by educators and
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coherence cohesion
Work on reducing repetition and enhancing logical transitions between paragraphs for improved coherence.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to strengthen the argument and evidence for both viewpoints.
introduction conclusion present
Clear presentation of both perspectives in the introduction, setting up a balanced discussion.
relevant specific examples
Good use of examples to illustrate how teachers and student attitudes affect academic success.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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