Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some people think that
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should be taught by their
parents
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about how to function as useful members of
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,
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others think that sending
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to educational institutions is the best way for them to study
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the latter opinion can be beneficial in
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cases, I believe
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of
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much more important
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the development of the
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. On the one hand, schools can be considered as the best place for
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to learn how to be
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good
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. Standardized educational methods can improve
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' cognitive development for the future.
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, the president of Azerbaijan who has a significant contribution to the country, namely Ilham Aliyev, graduated from Baku State University
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a lot of educational alumnus
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society
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, the proportion of
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much less than the normal standards since it is totally different and interdependent. I believe that
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play a pivotal role in the development of
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's attitudes, and they can teach them how to be good citizens. In Azerbaijan,
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, classes consist of 40
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which
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the situation harder for the teachers to work with
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one by one.
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,
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are
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about the
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and knowledge of their
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individually, so they can spend time
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them about the values of
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by reading
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traditional or historical books. In conclusion, both schools and
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might have a significant effect on preparing
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as the best citizens of the
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, I believe parental effect is much more important since
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have more information about their
children
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coherence cohesion
Ensure consistency in examples, avoiding ambiguity by clearly associating them with the argument made.
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Elaborate further on the potential benefits of both parents and schools in shaping societal values in children for a balanced view.
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Clearly stated opinion and covered both perspectives thoroughly.
coherence cohesion
Organized structure with distinct introduction, body, and conclusion facilitates understanding.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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