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Band 7

You recently went to the cinema and think that you left something that belongs to you there. Write a letter to the cinema manager. In your letter say when you were at the cinema and which film you saw describe what item you have lost and where you think you left it tell the manager what you want him/her to do

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
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 letter to request to find my gold ring which I had lost in your cinema hall when I came to watch a newly released movie "THE HERO" on 27th of may 2025 in the hall no. 2. I am quite sure that till the first half the ring was on my finger because I have clicked number of pictures before entering the hall and till the intermission. After that, I do not have any idea how
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 ring fell down from my hand. I know
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 would be a difficult task but it might be near to my seat
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 B23. To address
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 issue, kindly try to check near to my seat row or communicate with the cleaning staff member.
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, pasting the pictures of the ring would be an ideal option. Hopefully, these actions would helpful to find my ring. Thank you for your attention to
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 matter. Yours faithfully. Waris Saroye

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure your ideas follow a clear order. Each paragraph should have one main idea.
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Add a more polite request, such as 'I would appreciate your assistance in finding my ring.'
coherence and cohesion
Try to proofread for minor errors to improve clarity. For example, use 'would be helpful' instead of 'would be helpful.'
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You provided specific details about the date and film, which helps the manager identify your visit.
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Your letter has a clear purpose, which is to find your lost ring.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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