The pie chart gives information about worldwide expenditure on different categories

The pie chart gives information about worldwide expenditure on different categories
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie chart gives information about worldwide expenditure on different categories
The two pie charts illustrate worldwide expenses in five different categories and rates of different residents.
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it is clear that
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the first chart shows different aspects of spending by households, and the second pie chart shows a rating percentage of the population. Looking at bigger figures
first,
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the majority of people spent a lot of money on other things, and the second largest spending was the food,
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the other categories recorded just under 20% Looking at the world population, we can see that, the people from Asia were highest at 57%,
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the other populations were in the minority compared to Asia, they are only under 14%
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Europe and
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America followed a similar percentage

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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