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The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table and pie graph display the number of
students
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 who do
research
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 in Australian universities in the years 2001 and 2010.
Overall
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 an increase in the number of
students
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do
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research
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 in 2010. Local
studnts
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students
 did more
research
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 in both years than international
students
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. Most of the
stdents
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students
 who do
research
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 in both years are local males. The
precentages
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percentages
percentage
 of
locals
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decrease
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decreases
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while
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 the
internationals
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decrease
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decreases
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. The table shows that the number of
students
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 from the local city
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 33,657 which was higher than the
internationals
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make
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did
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the research
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research
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researched
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 at 5,192 in 2010 with
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a
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 total
38,894
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of 38,894
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.
Locals
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do
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 more
research
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 in 2010 at 39,488 which is higher than the
internationals
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which
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14,593 of them make
research
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. The total of both
students
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 in 2010 was 54,081 which was higher than 2001 with 38,849
students
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.
According to
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 the pie
chart
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chart,
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 the
precentages
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percentages
percentage
 of
locals
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 in 2010 were higher than
internationals
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 at 87% and most of them were men at 43.0% and 35.0% in 2001 and 2010 respectively.
Loacal
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Local
 women were lower at 44.0% in 2001 and went down to 38.0% in 2010. The
proportions
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proportion
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 of
locals
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 dropped to 73%. The
percentages
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percentage
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 of
students
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 from other countries
were
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 lower at 13% in 2001 and grew to just above the quarter in 2010. International
male
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males
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 were higher than females at 9.0% and 12.0% in 1001 and 2010 respectively. International women went
uo
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up
 from 4.0% and 15.0% in 2001 and 2010 respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, research, locals, internationals with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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