The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. How the Unemployed Spend their Time, UK, last year
last
Linking Words
year
unemployed men decreased their Use synonyms
time
in housework, shopping, job hunting, Use synonyms
gardering
, reading, staying in bed and visiting town after morning. we can clearly say that many unemployed men did not Correct your spelling
gardening
much
interest Add a missing verb
have much
with
reading and staying in bed after Change preposition
in
morning
. We can easily see that unemployed men increased their Correct article usage
the morning
time
in visiting friends or relatives, TV, walking, nothing/ sitting around and drinking Use synonyms
after
Change preposition
in
morning
Correct article usage
the morning
last
Linking Words
year
. Use synonyms
however
, their Linking Words
time
stayed unchanged decorating and playing Use synonyms
sport
.
when we look Fix the agreement mistake
sports
unemployed
women's Change preposition
at unemployed
time
Use synonyms
last
Linking Words
year
, we can see many information. unemployed women increased their Use synonyms
time
in visiting friends or relatives, Use synonyms
gardering
, TV, reading and sitting around after morning and Correct your spelling
gardening
also
we can see that their spending Linking Words
time
Use synonyms
decreaded
with housework, shopping, job hunting, decorating walking, Correct your spelling
decreased
visiting
town after morning. When we look Correct word choice
and visiting
the
list, we can Change preposition
at the
also
find that Linking Words
last
Linking Words
year
unemployed women did not Use synonyms
spent
Change the verb form
spend
time
staying in bed and playing Use synonyms
sport
after morning and their spare Fix the agreement mistake
sports
time
with drinking Use synonyms
stay
Wrong verb form
stayed
same
after morning.Correct article usage
the same
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