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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. How the Unemployed Spend their Time, UK, last year

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. How the Unemployed Spend their Time, UK, last year
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last
Linking Words
year
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 unemployed men decreased their
time
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 in housework, shopping, job hunting,
gardering
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gardening
, reading, staying in bed and visiting town after morning. we can clearly say that many unemployed men did not
much
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have much
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 interest
with
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in
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 reading and staying in bed after
morning
Correct article usage
the morning
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. We can easily see that unemployed men increased their
time
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 in visiting friends or relatives, TV, walking, nothing/ sitting around and drinking
after
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in
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morning
Correct article usage
the morning
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last
Linking Words
year
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.
however
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, their
time
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 stayed unchanged decorating and playing
sport
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sports
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. when we look
unemployed
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at unemployed
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 women's
time
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last
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year
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, we can see many information. unemployed women increased their
time
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 in visiting friends or relatives,
gardering
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gardening
, TV, reading and sitting around after morning and
also
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 we can see that their spending
time
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decreaded
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decreased
 with housework, shopping, job hunting, decorating walking,
visiting
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and visiting
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 town after morning. When we look
the
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at the
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 list, we can
also
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 find that
last
Linking Words
year
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 unemployed women did not
spent
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spend
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time
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 staying in bed and playing
sport
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sports
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 after morning and their spare
time
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 with drinking
stay
Wrong verb form
stayed
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same
Correct article usage
the same
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 after morning.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, last".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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