Some people believe that there should be a gap year after finishing high school (secondary school) and before starting university. To what extent you agree or disagree?
Taking a break before starting university
life
is considered important for some people as it helps them relax and recharge before going to Use synonyms
challenging
world. I completely agree with Add an article
a challenging
this
statement and will discuss my viewpoints in Linking Words
this
essay.
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Firstly
, youngsters spend Linking Words
their
almost 14 years in school education and Correct pronoun usage
apply
secondary
school year Correct article usage
the secondary
are
mostly Correct subject-verb agreement
is
stressfull
for every kid because of its Correct your spelling
stressful
neck to neck
competition and sleepless nights. Add a hyphen
neck-to-neck
Hence
, to avoid burnout it is vital to take a step back and do something different from Linking Words
study
so that they can become Add an article
the study
better
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a better
person
and more confident to take Use synonyms
future
challenges. Change preposition
on future
For example
, in Linking Words
this
gap Linking Words
year
they can do volunteer work at places like hospitals, old age homes etc which will teach them Add a comma
year,
life
lessons from Use synonyms
community
and Correct article usage
the community
elderly
.
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the elderly
Secondly
, by taking a break one do things which they could not do because of continuous school Linking Words
life
. Use synonyms
Moreover
, it will Linking Words
also
give Linking Words
opportunity
to learn a new skill that can help them in future studies or by which a Add an article
the opportunity
an opportunity
person
could do a job in future Use synonyms
while
studying which provides a Linking Words
person
with Use synonyms
sense
of independence. Add an article
a sense
the sense
For example
, a study at Cambridge University shows that students who do Linking Words
part time
work Add a hyphen
part-time
while
studying are more happy in Linking Words
life
than others because they feel more confident and have more social Use synonyms
life
skills.
In conclusion, I completely Use synonyms
in agreement
with Wrong verb form
agree
this
statement that having a break before starting Linking Words
furture
studies is considered important as it has many benefits and helps in making Correct your spelling
future
further
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person
a better version of themselves.Fix the agreement mistake
people
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