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Some people believe that there should be a gap year after finishing high school (secondary school) and before starting university. To what extent you agree or disagree?

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Taking a break before starting university
life
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 is considered important for some people as it helps them relax and recharge before going to
challenging
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 world. I completely agree with
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 statement and will discuss my viewpoints in
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 essay.
Firstly
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, youngsters spend
their
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almost 14 years in school education and
secondary
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the secondary
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 school year
are
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is
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 mostly
stressfull
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stressful
 for every kid because of its
neck to neck
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 competition and sleepless nights.
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, to avoid burnout it is vital to take a step back and do something different from
study
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the study
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 so that they can become
better
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a better
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person
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 and more confident to take
future
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 challenges.
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, in
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 gap
year
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year,
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 they can do volunteer work at places like hospitals, old age homes etc which will teach them
life
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 lessons from
community
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the community
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 and
elderly
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the elderly
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.
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, by taking a break one do things which they could not do because of continuous school
life
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.
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, it will
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 give
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to learn a new skill that can help them in future studies or by which a
person
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 could do a job in future
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 studying which provides a
person
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 with
sense
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a sense
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 of independence.
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, a study at Cambridge University shows that students who do
part time
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 work
while
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 studying are more happy in
life
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 than others because they feel more confident and have more social
life
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 skills. In conclusion, I completely
in agreement
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 with
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 statement that having a break before starting
furture
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future
further
 studies is considered important as it has many benefits and helps in making
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person
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people
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 a better version of themselves.

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coherence cohesion
Work on improving sentence structure and grammar to enhance clarity.
task achievement
Include more specific examples to strengthen arguments and make them more relatable.
introduction conclusion present
The essay provides a clear introduction, expressing a strong stance on the topic.
supported main points
Main points are well-supported with reasons and some examples.
complete response
The essay addresses the topic effectively, covering relevant points for both viewpoints.

Your opinion

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If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gap year
  • real-world experience
  • informed decisions
  • career paths
  • personal development
  • maturity
  • volunteering
  • academic momentum
  • transitioning
  • continuity in education
  • financial burden
  • burnout
  • academic life
  • higher education
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