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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart depicts the information about the
number
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 of
households
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 in the US as per their yearly
income
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 in the given time period of 2207, 2011,
2015
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and 2015
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. Data
given
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are given
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 in millions.
Overall
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, no significant changes were observed during the time.
However
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, $100,000 and more
income
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 shows
increasing
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an increasing
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 trend in the
number
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 of
households
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. To commence with, in the initial year 2007,
households
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'
number
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 was 25 and
27for
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27 for
 those who had
income
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 less than $25,000 and $25,000 to $49,999 respectively. Both of
which
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these
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reaches
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reach
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to
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apply
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its
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their
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 peak in the year 2011
to
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on
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 about 28 and 30.
Whereas
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, it again showed
little
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a little
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 decrease by the end of
the
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apply
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2015.
Furthermore
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,
highest
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the highest
a highest
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income
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 of $ 100,000 and more presented fluctuations in the
number
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 of
households
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 starting from 29
than
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then
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decreased
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decreasing
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 to 27 and
finally
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reached to
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reaching
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 the maximum level
at
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of
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 33 in the final year. Probing
further
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, the annual
income
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 of $50,000 to $74,999 and $ 75,000 to $99, 999
was remained
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remained
has remained
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 unchanged with a slight difference in all the 3 years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, households, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reaches" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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