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The graph gives information about the percentage of the population if four different Asian countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020 with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information about the percentage of the population if four different Asian countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020 with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The current graph illustrates the
percentage
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 of the
population
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 living in cities in four Asian
countries
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 from 1970 to 2020 and predicts the
percentage
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 of
this
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population
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 in 10 and 20
upcoming
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years. At first glance, it is comprehended that the
population
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 of all these
countries
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 has increased from 1970 up until now and will keep rising in the two next decades. What is more, it is predicted that Malaysia will have the highest
percentage
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 of
population
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 in 2040. in 1970,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 was the most populated country among these
countries
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by
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 approximately more than 30
percent
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per cent
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 of
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population
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the population
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 living in cities.
Malasia
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Malaysia
 was the second most populated one
by
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 almost 30
percent
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per cent
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 of
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population
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the population
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.
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, Thailand and Indonesia were the third and
last
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one
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ones
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by
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respectively 18% and nearly 13% of
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population
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the population
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. The
population
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 of all these
countries
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 not only followed an increasing trend but
it
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also
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 will be increasing until 2030 and 2040. In 1992, the
percentage
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 of
Malaysia
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Malaysia's
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population
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 shot up counterweighting
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 and it will be significantly rising to the top of more than 80%
until
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by
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 2040 making
this
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 country the most populated one by
then
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. The lowest
population
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 will belong to Indonesia
by
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with
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the
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a
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percentage
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 of almost 35 in 2040.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, population, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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