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The chart below gives information about on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the year 1990 and 2010.

The chart below gives information about on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the year 1990 and 2010.
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The chart above illustrates
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the generiousity
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generiousity
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generosity
 of
british
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British
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 people in 1990 and 2010.
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, it can be seen that there is a tendency
of increasing
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for an increased
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 number of people who give away their money in most of the age
group
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groups
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, except for
age
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the age
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 group 51-60 and >65. Based on the observation, youngsters tend to spend more money on charity where the percentage
keep
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 increasing in both years with the biggest portion
is
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from young
adult
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adults
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 with more than 40%.
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, adult older than 51 years old
experiencing
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 a downturn in their contributions in 2010 compared to 2019. Looking more closely, the highest portion of contributions is during 2019 from the population from 36-50 years old with
ratio
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a ratio
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almost
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of almost
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 45%. Meanwhile,
on
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in
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the
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contrast, the smallest one is from the youngest population in 2020 with less than 10%.
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