The bar chart shows the percentage of adults who were overweight or obese (too fat or much too fat) in one country from 1965 to 2015.

The bar chart shows the percentage of adults who were overweight or obese (too fat or much too fat) in one country from 1965 to 2015.
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The bar chart and pie charts illustrate the proportion of individuals who were suffering from obesity in a specific country between 1965 to 2015.
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, it is evident that over the years ,
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become more unhealthy and their weight has increased significantly from 1965 to 2015. Starting from 1965 , there were approximately 40% of adults who were overweight, in 1975 and 1985 there were
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nearly 45% proportion of
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which was relatively constant in the first three years.In 1995 the proportion started to rise to reach 60%
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in 2005 and 2015 there was a significant increase to peak at 70 % in the final year. In terms of a pie chart which described the number of adults who were divided into 4 groups.the biggest percentage of individuals was those
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who suffered from obesity (too fat) which was 34% ,
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31% of
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were overweight. There was 29% of individuals who were healthy and underweight and the lowest percentage was
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severely obese which was just 6%.
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