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The table chart depicts that information about expenditure consumers on food, clothes, and leisure in five countries Spain, Turkey, Ireland, Sweden, and Italy in 2002.

The table chart depicts that information about expenditure consumers on food, clothes, and leisure in five countries Spain, Turkey, Ireland, Sweden, and Italy in 2002.
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The table chart gives a comparison of consumer spending in three categories, including food, clothes and leisure
while
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 the table illustrates the proportion of five different countries: Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and
Turkey
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 in 2002. First of all, the communities of
Turkey
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's highest percentage 32.14% spent money on Food and tobacco,
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 the Ireland people were lower than in
Turkey
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 in 2002.
Furthermore
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, in Italy, Sweden and Spain families spend approximately 17% of total consumer costs on dishes and drinks.
On the other hand
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, most people use less money to buy clothing than meals and beverages.
For instance
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,
Turkey
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's population expended 6.63% of their monthly salary on footwear,
subsequently
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, Italy's public is greater than all the countries. Regarding free time and education, Ireland and Spain consumers spend about 2% of their income,
while
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 Italy,
Turkey
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 and Sweden communities are lower than these people.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words turkey with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure patterns
  • consumer spending
  • cultural priorities
  • economic conditions
  • disposable income
  • standard of living
  • work-life balance
  • proportion of spending
  • cultural preferences
  • comparison of spending
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