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The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010.

The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010.
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The bar chart indicates the average of the population who passed in driving license compared to
men
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 and
women
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 in one country in Asia between 1980 and 2010.
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, the quantities of females who passed tests
bigger
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 than
men
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 even at the same time,
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, the proportion of
men
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 has gradually increased but
women
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 dropped in the
last
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 year.
To begin
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 with, the percentage of
women
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 who got a license in 1980 is close to 50% which is less than others. In the next year it slightly to 50% addition in the figure for 2000 jumps to 70% which is the highest total of portion
women
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 who passed a driving test;
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, at the next age, the number dropped to 65%.
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men
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 categories in 1980 only nearly 30% of
men
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 passed the test and in 1990 amount of males who could pass the test increased to 35%;
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, the interestingly in
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 figure is in the year 2000 which rose to 50% at any rate in 2010 the number of males who passed the license remains the same numeral.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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