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many processed food and ready-meals contain preservatives and chemicals. do you think that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages ?

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the consumption of ready-to-eat
food
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are
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 increasing
day-by-day
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day by day
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 in
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 current era.
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 excessive usage of
preservative
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preservatives
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 and
diffrent
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different
 chemicals
were
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was
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 seen in prepackaged
food
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, I believe that
drawbacks
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 of
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 outweigh the advantages of
this
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phenomena
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. To start with, there
some
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are some
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of
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apply
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disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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 of having a high
contain
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of
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preseavative
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preservative
preservatives
 and chemical
compound
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compounds
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. First and foremost, added chemical composition to processed
food
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 could lead to
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a negactive
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negactive
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negative
 impact on
human
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 body.
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 could cause disturbance in
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the secreation
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secreation
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secretion
creation
 of natural body chemicals
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 as
hormons
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hormones
.
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, as per the research article
over-consuption
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overconsumption
 of
cannned
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canned
caned
food
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 in women was the leading
etiology
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aetiology
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 of
menstual
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menstrual
mental
problem
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problems
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.
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,
salt
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 as
preservative
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a preservative
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 is utilized as
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a primarily
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primarily
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 ingredient in
processed
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the processed
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food
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 industry.
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,
salt
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 is
excellent
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an excellent
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 preservative,
salt
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 is
sovely
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severely
 responsible for some
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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chronic diseases
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Hypertension
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as Hypertension
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, Kidney
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and kidney
 disease in the human body.
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, there are some benefits of capitalizing
usage
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the usage
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 of
presevatives
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preservatives
 in canned
food
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.
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adding a chemical in
package
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food
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increasing
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increases
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 the
shelflife
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shelf life
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 of
food
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.
Food
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 can stay fresh for
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a
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 longer time and
also
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 consume for
long
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 period of time. it will not only aid in
food
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 scarcity but
also
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 reduce the wastage of fresh
food
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.
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, even
salt
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used
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was used
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 as
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a perservative
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perservative
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preservative
preservatives
 in
diffrent
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different
era
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eras
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 of
the
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apply
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human history. In conclusion, the
benifits
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benefits
 of using various chemical elements and
preservative
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preservatives
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 in precooked
food
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for
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the maximize
the
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apply
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food
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 usage.
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, the downsides of
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 may have
the
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 major effect on
individual
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an individual
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 level
as well as
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county
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the county
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 level as
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 could put
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a stain
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stain
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strain
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 on
healthcare
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the healthcare
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 system.

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Task Response
Ensure to address all parts of the essay prompt in detail. While you've presented arguments for both sides, expand more on the explanations and differences between them.
Coherence and Cohesion
Improve the logical structure of your essay. While there is an introduction and a conclusion, the body paragraphs could benefit from clear topic sentences and transitions to link ideas smoothly.
Language Accuracy
Check grammar and spelling for small inaccuracies ('negactive' instead of 'negative', 'secreation' instead of 'secretion'). A more polished essay will enhance clarity and avoid misunderstanding.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which frames your arguments well.
Task Achievement
You provided relevant examples, such as the impact of canned food on women's health, which strengthens the argument about disadvantages.
Task Response
You've successfully addressed both the advantages and disadvantages of preservatives and chemicals in processed foods, showing a balanced view.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • processed food
  • ready-meals
  • preservatives
  • chemicals
  • convenience
  • shelf life
  • food waste
  • nutritional preservation
  • artificial additives
  • health risks
  • culinary diversity
  • environmental impact
  • pollution
  • resources depletion
  • balanced diet
  • consumer preference
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