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Band 5.5

Today,people are using the things and throwing or replacing it with latest models or latest fashion . Do the disadvantages of throwaway society outweigh any possible economic advantage ?

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In recent years, many people
are
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 into fast fashion.
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Also
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Also,
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 disposable utensils are upcoming problems of the environment. It's easy to throw
things
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 away and buy another. But I think
this
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 type of society will lead us to major problems like climate change, air pollution
and
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apply
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etc. In my opinion,
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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 of
throwaway
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a throwaway
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 society outweigh
economic
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the economic
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 advantages for two reasons.
Firstly
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, throwing cannot make
economical
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economic
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 benefits more than using
things
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 with care. Let's say we have a coffee machine. We bought it about 2 years ago, but it still works well.
From the
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 company that made
this
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 coffee machine, sent you a message. There's a new product. In
this
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 case, buying a new machine is a waste of money. It might give you some new modes but there's no reason to do it. The point is, you can change your
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
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 when they have problems. But if they are not, it costs more to recycle our
trashes
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trash
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.
Secondly
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, we might buy products more expensive in the future. We use resources
such
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 as
woods
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wood
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,
golds
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gold
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,
and
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apply
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plastics, etc. If we
dispose
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dispose of
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things
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 like phones,
computers
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and computers
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 easily,
this
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 will lead to
depletion
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the depletion
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 of natural resources. The emphasis should be on sustainable development and the circular economy rather than short-term economic gains from increased consumer spending. To summarise, throwing or replacing can't be a solution for two reasons. Economically, consumer spending can make our market more active. But
this
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 doesn't mean economic growth. Rather, the governments or companies will spend more money to recycle or discard the
rubbishes
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rubbish
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 that we
made
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make
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. And from the perspective of
sustainablility
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sustainability
, more replacement means manufacturers have to make more products to buy.
This
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 will lead to the lack of resources and we will buy
things
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 with more price tags in the future.

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task achievement
The essay provides a clear stance on the disadvantages of a throwaway society, presenting a strong argument backed by logical reasoning.
task achievement
Examples such as the coffee machine provide a relatable understanding of the point being discussed.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are effectively utilized to encapsulate the main points of the essay.
coherence cohesion
The essay maintains a logical progression of ideas from the introduction to the conclusion.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Disposable culture
  • Planned obsolescence
  • Sustainable development
  • Circular economy
  • Consumerism
  • Environmental degradation
  • Resource depletion
  • Ecological footprint
  • Waste management
  • Conspicuous consumption
  • Product lifecycle
  • Repair and maintenance economy
  • Downcycling
  • Material resource efficiency
  • Behavioural shift
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