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The tables below show people's reasons for giving up smoking, and when they intend to give up. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below show people's reasons for giving up smoking, and when they intend to give up. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given tables provide information on why people want to quit smoking and when they will do it.
Overall
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, There are five reasons that drive individuals to stop smoking and the most effective one is present health problems
while
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 the least number of smoked
cigarettes
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in
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on
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 a daily basis is for
thoes
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those
 who will quit in the next month. The top significant cause to stop smoking is current health issues where the percentage of smoked
cigarettes
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 in a
day
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 is 12%. Followed by Family pressure with 16% of
cigarettes
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. The least effective reason is better health generally with around 71%
smoked
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smoking
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cigarettes
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.
Moreover
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, both financial cost and lowering the risk of smoking illnesses are approximately similar
with
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at
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 31% and 25% respectively.
On the other hand
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, Those who decided to quit smoking during the next month smoked the lowest number of
cigarettes
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 per
day
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 about 12%.
Then
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 those who will stop within
next
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the next
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 year (21%) followed by the future quitters during six months (35%) which is the highest ratio of
cigarettes
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 per
day
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. The percentage of
cigarettes
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 in a
day
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 for those who want to stop is 71%
while
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 their counterparts are 29%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cigarettes, day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • motivation
  • intent to quit
  • awareness
  • forward-thinking
  • healthier lifestyle
  • financial considerations
  • social pressures
  • family pressures
  • significant life event
  • personal milestones
  • behavior change
  • addiction
  • commitment levels
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