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The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. N

The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. N
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The table below demonstrates information about students
which
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who
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be
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were
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 present
at
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for several Secondary
School
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 types between 2000 and 2009.
Overall
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, there are four secondary
schools
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such
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 as
specialist
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, grammar, voluntary- controlled and community
schools
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.
Furthermore
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, three of them decreased and that one
school
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 increased over the period.
Firstly
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, from 2000 to 2005 only community
schools
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 gave good
result
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results
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 their percentage went up,
while
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specialist
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, grammar and voluntary - controlled
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school
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schools
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fall
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fell
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 down.
For instance
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, voluntary
schools
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 had
a
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 biggest difference from others in 2000 it was 52% and in 2005 it was 38%.
However
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,
specialist
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schools
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 had a little change from
initial
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an initial
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like
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12% declined to 11%.
Secondly
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, from 2005 to 2009
specialist
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schools
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 again plummeted
only
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by only
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for
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apply
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1 per cent. But, voluntary controlled
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school
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schools
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 collapsed more than before from 38% to 20%.
Moreover
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, community
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school
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schools
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 had good
result
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results
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 over the period in 2000 they had 12 % and at
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the end
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end
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end,
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 they jumped to 58%
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, schools, specialist with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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