Pressure on the school and university students is increasing and students are pushed to hard work when they are young. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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that the education is backbone of society. In
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there is more
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on school and
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institutional
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for their performance and always
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encouraged
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children
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age will help to embrace their holistic
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encourage
them to perform better. Many times when there are restrictions in their curriculum will help them to achieve goals.
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young age is
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a way for career and
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personality
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. Putting
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pressure
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university student
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helps for
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rapid
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.As young segment is the future workforce and leaders of every nation.
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pursuits
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, if
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have some restricted time constraints to submit
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projects or
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studies
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of time. On the flip side,
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children
doing
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hard for their
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their
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mental growth. These days in many schools children have bags
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heavier
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their own weight.
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expectations of
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teenagers
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them more introverts,
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in
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their
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personality
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,
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increasing
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youngsters will sometimes
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them to do
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interesting
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things or
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parts.
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, "Three Idiots" is one of the best
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to define
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whole situation for
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,
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where
when
they
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to
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work
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hard
where
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they
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don't
want to do anything. As their ways of thinking
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were different, but under
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pressure
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study
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. And the end results were not that splendid. In conclusion, Pushing
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to
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hard in
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schools
and universities is good because they will learn lots of things regarding
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,time management and many more. No doubt with
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teenagers should always
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encouraged
to take part in extra
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institutional
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curriculum
curricular
activities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic excellence
  • job market
  • technological advancements
  • government policies
  • stress
  • workforce
  • work ethic
  • time-management skills
  • mental health
  • holistic development
  • peer pressure
  • extracurricular activities
  • parental expectations
  • performance metrics
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