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The chart below shows the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart shows the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and the amount of time spent doing housework in
household
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households
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 in one country between 1920 and 2019. In
this
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essay,
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i
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I
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 will explain the information by selecting and reporting the main features
,
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apply
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and comparing between
percentage
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 of households with electrical appliances and the number of
hours
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 of housework , per household during
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period
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the period
a period
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 of 1920 and 2019.
i
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I
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 will talk about the
hours
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 per week they were spent and the electrical appliance.
first
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 of all, I will start with
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period
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the period
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 1920 the people
was
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 primitive at that time so they were electrecal useless
i
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I
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 think because rare to be available at that time or it was expensive so the
percentage
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 of households was low.And in the
period
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 between 1940 and 1980 the
percentage
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it
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of it
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 was rising but approximately the same
percentage
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 .In 2000 and 2019 there was the significant rise and the
percentage
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 was at
the
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its
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 peak
percentage
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.
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, the number of
hours
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 per week they spent was reduced
amoung
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among
amount
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period
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. In the end whenever people demand to use electrical appliances they will spend fewer spending
hours
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 in
household
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the household
a household
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.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 93%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, hours, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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