The charts below show the chanages in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the chanages in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
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electrical
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appliances
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and the amount of generation for the period from 1920 to 2019.It is clear from the graph that the electrical appliance helps the people
for
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save and reduce spent
hour
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for house cleaning.
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what is shown for comparison
it
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the first one for washing machines the rate of households in 1920 was 40 and increased ratio to level 72 number .and the second appliance refrigerator from zero to a high level in 2019 was 100 per cent and the
last
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match in the important one vacuum cleaner starts from 30
fee
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to higher levels almost same second motor . and the hours and save time from 1920 to 2019 start from 50 to 10 .
To sum up
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,we could say that with more and develop all the electrical
appliance
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appliances
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it other hands for
person
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a person
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to save
hour
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an hour
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for cleaning.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • appliance ownership
  • technological advancements
  • housework
  • efficiency
  • innovation
  • economic growth
  • societal roles
  • gender dynamics
  • automation
  • manual labor
  • domestic chores
  • leisure time
  • quality of life
  • smart technology
  • artificial intelligence
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