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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Generally,
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 the growth in technology,
people
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's
life style
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 changed. Even the way they follow the
news
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 has changed since decades ago. It is argued that in
future
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the future
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people
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 will not be interested in following the
news
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 in printed ones, and will read them online
instead
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. I agree with
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 view, and in
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essay
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i
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 will support my opinion with some examples. If we look at our lives, we can obviously see that
,
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 in our daily lives we
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 electronic devices to do lots of things.
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, we
use
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 laptops or computers in our workplace
as well as
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celephones
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cellphones
telephones
 to make calls.
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, we tend to feel more comfortable using these devices for even
further
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 things
such
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 as reading
news
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,
instead
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 of buying a paper-based one.
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, some of us have already followed some of
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news
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 pages on social media, which could tell that
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 fact is likely to happen.
Secondly
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, based on some articles about tech and
gadget
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, lots of companies are trying to make virtual reality glasses. These glasses could show
what ever
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whatever
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 you see on your phone or laptop, in its glasses.
That is
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 to say that technological improvement would lead us to
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 as
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degital
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digital
 services as we can
such
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 as reading
news
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 and articles.
In addition
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, in
this
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way
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 we tend to become informed of the global
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 faster and if we want to read more, we can easily go to other pages.
On the other hand
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,
people
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belief
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 that
newspaper
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 would continue to exist, which seems highly unlikely to me. In
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other words, the only reason it still is printed is that there
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 still some
people
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 who are not completely familiar with working with electronic devices. A good example of these
people
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 would be elder
people
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.
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, they tend to feel more comfortable
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use
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 everything in the way they are used to it and following the
news
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 is not an exception. In conclusion,
younger
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the younger
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 generation
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 to do everything online and electronically rather than
other
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in other
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 ways. So
i
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I
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 think that in
near
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the near
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 future online-based books
ot
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or
 articles will be more common than now even.
Due to
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, printed
version
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versions
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 of them would
not
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no
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 longer exist anymore.
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task achievement
Try to provide more specific examples to fully support your points. This will help reinforce your arguments.
task achievement
Ensure that there are no grammatical errors and spelling mistakes in the essay. This will improve the clarity of your ideas.
coherence cohesion
Consider using more sophisticated linking words or phrases to connect your ideas and make the essay flow better.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which frame the discussion well.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph is logically structured, maintaining clear progression from one idea to the next.
coherence cohesion
The main points are generally well supported, with a clear opinion stated and backed up.
task achievement
The language and vocabulary used are appropriate for academic writing, contributing to task achievement.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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