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The bar chart below shows average UK salaries, by city. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows average UK salaries, by city. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph compares the data of earning incomes from workers in seven different areas namely London, Machester, Glasglow, Bristol, Birmingham, Edinburgh, and Cambridge which
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 by
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 and the average
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salaries.
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, England has the highest participants
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 and the most competitive wages
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 Birmingham received the cheapest paid off
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 Cambridge only contributed
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 the small amount participants
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 the survey.
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 with, there are 50,951 participants from London and they
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 significant money of € 33,634
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 Birmingham only
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 the standard of € 25,531 from 2,949 people.
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 by Cambridge respondents
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gain
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 wages of € 29,854 but it only comprised low respondents by 2,180.
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, Bristol and Glasglow have
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samples
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totalling 3111 and 3113, respectively.
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, in terms of salary, they get € 27,828 and € 26,150.
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, the sample of Manchesters is 4,643 and Edinburgh is approximately
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half
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 Manchesters.
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,
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Edinburgh
 get
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 salary
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 27,592 compared to Machester only accounted
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 25,909.
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