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The chart below shows the percentage of a drug company’s total sales, by region, from 2002 to 2006.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of a drug company’s total sales, by region, from 2002 to 2006.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph displays the proportions of a
drug
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 company's
sales
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 in America, Europe and
Asia
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 in the years 2002 and 2006.
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, the percentages of
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sales
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 in America and Europe decreased over the period
while
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 the
sales
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 in
Asia
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 increased over
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time. The
drug
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sales
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 in America began the period at 42% which was the highest among all regions in 2006.
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, it declined gradually until it reached just above the quarter in 2004 when it started the period at just above the third and rose slightly to 38% in 2004 when it began to drop to 30% in 2006.
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The company's
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sales
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 of drugs in
Asia
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 began the time at just a quarter in 2002 which was the lowest compared with other regions. After that, the
sales
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 in
Asia
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 began to rise gradually year on year until
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 reached 40% in 2006
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the highest in
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sales
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 among
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all
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four nations.
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