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Band 0.5

Who are you? Tell us your name; share with us your social media pages (e.g. LinkedIn, Twitter, Google+ - follow each other!) Where are you from? Your location; e.g. from the United States or other parts of the world What do you do? Your background; e.g. occupation, field or industry you work in What are your expectations for this course? What do you hope to learn that will contribute to your future plans?

My name is Christos Vissariou. I live in Thessaloniki - Greece. I
am
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have been
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 a lawyer, since 2010,
specialized
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specialising
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 in civil, criminal and administrative - public - litigation,
appointed
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and appointed
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 at the Court of Appeal. In my free time [when there is any, and there is very little] I do rowing and I have been involved in Aikido for 20 years. I have
also
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 been doing shiatsu since 2000 and alternative therapies -
Ukrainian
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the Ukrainian
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 method of treating musculoskeletal dysfunctions.

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task achievement
Consider expanding on your future expectations or what you hope to achieve from the course to fully address all points of the task.
coherence and cohesion
Try including an introductory sentence and a conclusion to make your response more cohesive and complete.
task achievement
You clearly described your professional background and expertise.
coherence and cohesion
The essay is logically structured and easy to follow.
task achievement
Provided specific details about personal interests, enriching the content.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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