Teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their communities. This is good foe the individuals concerned and society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree with htis view? Discuss, based on your own knowledge and experience.

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could start in their community. But should volunteering be free? Should it be done with no pay? or maybe, It could be paid but, just less of the amount? I think

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day through voting rooms. These jobs are tagged as volunteering but it is paid, maybe because it is a big responsibility to maintain harmony during election day. But don't get me wrong, I do volunteer

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to develop my skills of communication and being patient

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became beneficial to landing a managerial position in my company today. In the end, I would say

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kind of topic would really be decided by the person who is doing the

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a win-win situation for me.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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Nowadays in many countries there are some mandatory unpaid jobs for an specific period in various fields such as military service or charity . The teenagers should do this works usually when they are about 20 years old .

Teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their communities. This is good foe the individuals concerned and society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree with htis view? Discuss, based on your own knowledge and experience.

Fully explain your ideas

Many young people choose to take a year out between finishing school and starting university in order to gain work experience or to travel. The experience of non-academic life this offers benefits the individual when they return to education. To what extent do you agrede or disagree?

The process below shows life cycle of a species of a large fish called salmon

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

The rise of social media has affected personal relations and society as a whole. Do the advantage of using social media for communication outweigh the disadvantages. (CN)