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The map below shows the development of the town of Stromer between 1995 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the town of Stromer between 1995 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given map illustrates the advancements of the town of Stromer between 1995 and now. The most noticeable feature is that
area
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the area
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 of the farmland
minimized
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is minimized
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.
Moreover
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, the fields of
two
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forest
Change to a plural noun
forests
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minimized
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were minimized
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 and one of them was divided into
two
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 sections.
In contrast
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, many facilities were constructed
such
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 as apartments, shops, a school, and an
airport
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. The
airport
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 was located to the northeast.
In addition
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,
two
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 apartments are close to the
airport
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while
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 four apartments are far from the
airport
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. Meanwhile, the houses were relocated
at
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to
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 the other zone, combined from
two
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 to one.
Additionally
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,
school
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the school
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 surrounded by many shops was placed in the center of the town.
This
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 means that many people live in the town, including many children.
Lastly
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, the amounts of shops increased from one to six. To summarize,
although
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 the areas of forests, houses, and farmland
is
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are
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 seen as small, many facilities
was
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were
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 constructed, making people more comfortable than in the past.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, airport with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • development
  • residential buildings
  • green spaces
  • commercial areas
  • shopping mall
  • parking facilities
  • river
  • marina
  • tourism
  • leisure activities
  • transportation infrastructure
  • roads
  • roundabout
  • access
  • industrial area
  • community center
  • town square
  • residents
  • social interaction
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