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Every year large numbers of people migrate from one country to another for different reasons. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of migration for the individual and for society as a whole.

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Every year majority of individuals move between continents for various causes.
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 situation. On the one hand, there are a number of positive impacts on society that have come about because of travelling. Emigration has become convenient and cheaper, allowing us to be informed about other cultures and lifestyles.
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, several years ago I decided to pursue my education abroad, and it was one the greatest decisions that I have ever taken, as it allowed me to learn how English people cook and their approach to problems.
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, relocation put me in a situation where I had to understand the other psychology.
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, immigration has its drawbacks that should be considered. First and foremost, we have to look at the globalization side of it, because it is not
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language difference between countries.
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 a result, some languages can be disappeared once and for all.
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, leaving your own country means that you will not have your family or friends close to you, which can be difficult for some people.
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, living alone means that you will have to take care basically of everything by yourself. In conclusion, in my opinion, I would recommend everyone to travel as much as possible, as it might be a different way to experience new things and investigate other cultures.
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Ensure a smooth flow between ideas. Consider using more linking words or phrases to improve coherence.
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Pay attention to minor grammatical inaccuracies for a stronger positive impact.
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The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, outlining the main ideas.
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Specific personal experiences and examples are included to illustrate points.
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Both pros and cons of migration are addressed, showing understanding of the topic.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Migration
  • Migrate
  • Immigrant
  • Emigrant
  • Integration
  • Multiculturalism
  • Expatriate
  • Asylum seeker
  • Diaspora
  • Naturalization
  • Work permit
  • Visa
  • Residence
  • Citizenship
  • Deportation
  • Brain drain
  • Demographic
  • Xenophobia
  • Cultural shock
  • Social network
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