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In addition to academic subjects at school, schools also should cover practical skills such as car repairing and gardening. Do you agree or disagree with that statement?

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 like cooking and gardening should be at the same level as important as academic
subjects
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. I partially agree that academic
subjects
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 are vital for
students
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 who continue their study,
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 practical
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 who start working immediately after school. Today many schools cover many academic
subjects
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 which have some benefits for
students
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' future careers.
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, academic
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 help them to improve their mentality and would be helpful in their future jobs. Because many fields cover academic
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, for example, accountants or others who work in financial or economic spheres need mathematics to calculate cash flows, bonds, stocks and so on.
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,
engeneers
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engineers
 need physics to design structures, build vehicles and electronics and learn energy
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.
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, there are other sides of the coin. It's cool for your children.Practical
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, they seem to be in the same relationship with all
students
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. Because there are some kinds of
students
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 who don't want to continue their studies.They just would like to work and practical
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 are very good for them to find money easily.
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, if schools don't have any practical courses,
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 who desire to be a chief or mechanic have to go
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 courses, which
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 causes bad attendance and bad marks in school. In conclusion, in some circumstances, teaching more academic
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 than practical ones might cause discrimination among
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.
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 why I partially believe both
skills
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 should be of the same magnitude.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and that ideas flow logically. Minor errors in sentence structure sometimes disrupt the flow.
Task Achievement
Clarify the connection between practical skills and their importance alongside academic subjects, possibly by including more examples detailing the benefits.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion effectively bracket your essay, providing clear context and closure.
Task Achievement
You have covered both sides of the argument, making sure to address the question and providing some examples.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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