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The graph below shows relative price changes for fresh fruits and vegetables, sugars and sweets, and carbonated drinks between 1978 and 2009.

The graph below shows relative price changes for fresh fruits and vegetables, sugars and sweets, and carbonated drinks between 1978 and 2009.
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The line graph illustrates how many
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 alters for fresh fruits and vegetables, sugars and sweets, and carbonated drinks from 1978 to 2009
Overall
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, it is readily apparent that prices had a growth. Fresh fruits and vegetables had the highest
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 of alters throughout the period,
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 carbonated drinks had the lowest
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 throughout the year.
To begin
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 with, carbonated drinks had the highest
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 of alters in 1979 (60).
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,
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 figure rose slightly to just over 100 in 1987 and maintained the same level until 1989. After that, it continued to soar to just over 150
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 the end of the year.
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, the consumer
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 index had the lowest
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 at the beginning of the year (57). Following that,
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 number had a tremendous climb to 205 in 2007 and remained unchangeable until 2009.
On the other hand
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, fresh fruits and vegetables ranked at 55 in 1979.
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 it sored minimally to 100 in 1983 and dropped to 90 before increasing to 340 in 2007. But
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 figure dipped to just under 340 in 2009.
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, sugar and sweets stood at 55 in 1979.
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 it surged to 100 in 1982 before decreasing to reached at just under 100 in 1983. Afterwards, it went up significantly to 200
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 the end of the period

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Vocabulary: Replace the words price with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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