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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the united kingdom, Sweden, Italy and portugal between 1957 and 2007

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the united kingdom, Sweden, Italy and portugal between 1957 and 2007
The line graph illustrates how much
carbon
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dioxide
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 was produced by four countries (the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal) over 40 years between 1967 and 2007. Units are measured in metric tonnes.
Overall
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, we can clearly observe that
emissions
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 of
carbon
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dioxide
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 fell in the UK and Sweden,
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 in Italy and Portugal, they increased.
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, the UK produced the highest amount of
carbon
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dioxide
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emissions
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 throughout the period. With regards to the United Kingdom, average
carbon
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dioxide
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emissions
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 per person were close to 11 in 1967, and they gradually went down to 9 in 2007.
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, turning to Sweden, it accounted for over 8 in 1967,
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 reached its peak 10 years later and dramatically fell by 2007.
On the other hand
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,
carbon
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dioxide
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 produced by Italy was more than 4 at the beginning of the period, and it went up to almost 8 in 2007.
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, Portugal's CO2
emissions
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 stood at around 1 before rising steadily to almost 6 by the end of the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, dioxide, emissions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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